Hey im doing a story for my english hwk, ive only done what ive given below but i cant think of what else to write can you please help me add to it, it eeds to have similies and descriptivewords and loads of other stuff o yeh and let me no what you think .

Heres the story so far:

The cold air smashed in between the gushing cuts torn into to her skin, burning the insides of her body. “ Sorry Mum ” She grabbed the knife with her right hand dyed in blood, she held her arm steady with her other hand while closing her eyes tight and stabbed her mum rite in the chest. “ Don’t worry Mummy, You’ll be ok, Lucy said everything’s going to be alright ” Lily turns round smiling and moving as if she was a puppet being controlled by strings held above her, she giggled slowly turned her head up at the sky and washed her blonde wavy hair in the rain falling from the clouds. She skipped towards her Mum again, and whispered to the left of her “Lucy what do I do now;
I cant do that;
Ok fine”
Lily’s hands started shaking with fright, her face dropped as she picked up the knife still painted in her mums blood, she held it firmly in her two hands and pierced her chest once twice and a third time….

“Lily, Lily wakeup darling, its time to get up, breakfast is downstairs ” her mum said sweetly, Lily Slowly sat up sighing with relief but still persuading herself that what had just happened was a dream by scanning her mum for deep stab marks. Lily got up still feeling cautious around her surroundings, slid her feet into her fluffy navy blue slippers and ran down the stairs hoping that her dad hadn’t taken all the Belgian waffles.
She sat at the table delighted with fact that she was the first one to sit at the breakfast table or that mean she had the first pick at the lovely warm Belgian waffles as well as being able to use up the last of her dads favourite maple syrup, just to wind her dad up.

thanks again
That's pretty cool!
I like the way you open the story,it's really grabbing.
I think you should write about how like Lily is haunted by her dreams and how it like destroys her and drives her crazy!

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